Markus's Writing Narrative assessment- 16.02.15

Learner:  Markus Pakii   Learning Coach: Margaret Patrick     Date: 16th Feb 2015

Learning Area:  English- Writing Narrative Assessment Feb 2015

Learning Observed

Markus enjoyed the closing ceremony for the Deaf Provision at Papatoetoe East Primary School. He decided to use this experience for his writing. He recorded his story in a recount format.He was able to recall the the various parts of a recount using the hamburger model, prior to writing. He discussed this event with me and compiled a “helpful word “ list that arose out of our discussion so he would have them when he started writing.These included  words like; prayer, blessed, assembly, provision and celebration.  He demonstrates that he can use paragraphs. All were all linked to the celebration topic. The SVO sequence is well established and occasionally he uses the conjunction “and”. He can use capitals for proper nouns but will write words with capitals in the middle of sentences. He has used a variety of sentence starters. His use of the  past tense for a recount is inconsistent. The use of “to” and articles “the” or “a” are often missing. Markus is not rereading his writing. He needs to be prompted to self edit. He has used the adjectives, old and happy.His story is sequenced according to the time order of the events that made up the day’s celebration.High frequency words are spelt correctly.

Evidence of learning

Key Competencies/Vision Principles

Markus is writing at Level 1e of the KDEC/VADEC Developmental Writing Matrix (for Deaf Learners). He is demonstrating and developing his  his capabilities in Using Language, Symbols.

Next Learning Steps

Consistently use the past tense when writing a recount. Be mindful of irregular verbs eg sing/sung Edit for capital letters and full stops at beginning and end of sentences.Monitor use of other capitals for proper nouns. Add more detail to his story and share his feelings and reactions to engage the his audience more.. Use wider range of cohesive devices. Introduce using because along with and.